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HaikuWrimo S2008: 5 + 6 + 7

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guitar lessons
- obsession begets
a beautiful thing

hours of idol worship
and she finishes
a new masterpiece

doll-like face
talent, skill
inspires a new guitarist
I hearby bring you not one, not two, but THREE haiku about Versailles (Teru, specifically), as promised! xD

I put this in "Cheap and Tawdry Romance" as a sort of joke. :XD: Gotta love that fangirl love... :heart:

These poems are about how Teru, the rhythm guitarist (of the Japanese "visual kei" metal band Versailles) who I am currently semi-obsessed with, has inspired so much in me and other fans. Beautiful costumes, picking up the guitar, drawings, poems, taking better care of my looks... :D I *guess* that's a healthy kind of obsession... >>;;

The only haiku here that I'm really satisfied with is the first... what do you think about the others? Advanced Critique is encouraged and appreciated. ^^
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Utanapishtim's avatar
I love the use of assonance in July 5th and 6th.

You're doing well so far. Sorry I haven't commented regularly : (